This poem seems to go on and on and... I need help finding its core and winnowing away its garbage. All suggestions appreciated. Dewell
TRACTOR GRAVEYARD
Driving down Grant road
just off the 99
on an early autumn eve
there are miles and miles
of orchards, fields, vineyards.
From a distance
I can make out shapes
long lines of something,
ghostly, silhouettes,
in the middle of nowhere.
I stop for a better view
and stare at rows and rows
of old tractors, lined up
solemnly,
tires flat, treads broken, fenders rusted.
A once mighty army
chugging, clanking loudly,
now silenced,
brought to a standstill
no more ground to cultivate,
a final end-of-row.
Just before the sun sinks,
into an ominous
dusky haze,
I think about all the old farmers
gone now,
on these great machines
who bled, sacraficed, worked the land
under that brutal Rogue Valley sun,
side by side,
with my Dad.
-Dewell H. Byrd
TRACTOR GRAVEYARD
Driving down Grant road
just off the 99
on an early autumn eve
there are miles and miles
of orchards, fields, vineyards.
From a distance
I can make out shapes
long lines of something,
ghostly, silhouettes,
in the middle of nowhere.
I stop for a better view
and stare at rows and rows
of old tractors, lined up
solemnly,
tires flat, treads broken, fenders rusted.
A once mighty army
chugging, clanking loudly,
now silenced,
brought to a standstill
no more ground to cultivate,
a final end-of-row.
Just before the sun sinks,
into an ominous
dusky haze,
I think about all the old farmers
gone now,
on these great machines
who bled, sacraficed, worked the land
under that brutal Rogue Valley sun,
side by side,
with my Dad.
-Dewell H. Byrd