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July - ON HANDS

Post  Velvet F on Thu Jul 28, 2011 7:56 pm

This is an etheree: 10 lines, line number dictates number of syllables in that line.





ON HANDS



A

hand out

oir hand up

or helping hand?

Hand to hand combat,

handwriting on the wall,

a left-handed compliment.

A poor childhood and hand me downs.

Hired hand does hands on work all day.

Deal a hand, shake hands, or hand it over!

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Post  tsukany on Fri Jul 29, 2011 5:13 pm

Velvet.

I look forward to messing through this one. I want form poems to work even without the form. What would you do to this poem if you were not bound to the form? Then take that poem and force it back into the etheree.

Excellent last line.

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here're my dinner thoughts

Post  tsukany on Fri Jul 29, 2011 5:33 pm

HANDS

out
or up
for helping?
-to-hand combat
-writing on the wall
left-handed compliment
third-grade in hand-me-downs. Hir’d
hand blisters hands-on all day. Deal
a hand, shake hands, or hand it over!
Hand the poem to "The Professor." Ouch! (or Jerk or some other appropriate adjective)


Sorry. Just know that you're better than mine. Smile
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Re: July - ON HANDS

Post  Cindy on Mon Aug 01, 2011 1:21 am

Velvet F wrote:This is an etheree: 10 lines, line number dictates number of syllables in that line.





ON HANDS



A

hand out

oir hand up

or helping hand?

Hand to hand combat,

handwriting on the wall,

a left-handed compliment.

A poor childhood and hand me downs.

Hired hand does hands on work all day.

Deal a hand, shake hands, or hand it over!







I like this one the way it is. Had you considered "hands on" for the title?

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