I'm comfortable with stanza #1 after much cutting. Stanza #2 still gives me trouble... having difficulty expressing what we saw that was unique... it may be one word that is missing... Stanza #3 seems just right... and the title? glance or en passant? HELP! Dewell
A GLANCE
(en passant)
I going down the stairs
you going up.
We paused at the landing,
looked fully at each other.
We exchanged slight smiles,
shared an unguarded glimpse
of inner worlds.
You almost touched my shoulder
I almost brushed your sleeve
How can we ever forget each other now,
we who, for a moment, were so intimate?
-Dewell H. Byrd
A GLANCE
(en passant)
I going down the stairs
you going up.
We paused at the landing,
looked fully at each other.
We exchanged slight smiles,
shared an unguarded glimpse
of inner worlds.
You almost touched my shoulder
I almost brushed your sleeve
How can we ever forget each other now,
we who, for a moment, were so intimate?
-Dewell H. Byrd