A Tribute to Marjorie Content

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A Tribute to Marjorie Content

Post  Cindy on Tue Aug 30, 2011 8:09 pm


Canyon de Chelly, Summer, c. 1932


This is one section of a tribute for photographer, Marjorie Content. For each photo, I'm writing at least 3 different perspectives. In some cases, I'm noticing some repetition. Most are tanka although some are haiku and cinquain. I only observe syllable counts for cinquain. I will include links to the photos on the internet if I can find them.



a woman woven
into the sandstone
of canyon de chelly
tears of rain evaporate
before they ever touch her face


like a raven
she is surrounded by myths
and those once-in-a-while clouds
that take away
her shadows


stone towers protected
by their remoteness
every now and then
we find something
that outlasts our heartache


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Post  tsukany on Wed Aug 31, 2011 8:51 am

Cindy...I believe the strength of the poems is best illustrated in the first. It contains no "and" and no "pronoun." Just concrete image words. What if poems two and three were taken as separate offerings (then you'd introduce the woman before using a pronoun). If the poems are strong on their own, they will be fortress in triplicate. Smile

What wonderful "job" or idea you have. Thanks for sharing it with us.

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Post  Cindy on Wed Aug 31, 2011 4:20 pm

I have to decide if I want these to connect to each other or have each one stand on its own. Thanks for your suggestions.

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Post  tsukany on Wed Aug 31, 2011 10:37 pm

Cindy...I vote for them to remain together. But I would put them on separate papers so that they will feel alone. Once they are satisfying alone, I believe they will be magnificent together. My couple cents. Smile
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