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The Last Friday is a poetry editing group. Once a month, we post a poem and then offer feedback to the other poems on the Forum. We're a friendly but honest group. We value each other deeply and desire for every poet to be published or become famous.


    Chickens/ Dumplings

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    Pat


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    Post  Pat Sat Mar 28, 2015 9:30 pm

    Dewell, you are a master at the vernacular in many of your poems.  I'd stay with it all the way through.  I like the couplets.  EASY to read.  I tried to see if it had meter or not.  That would make it more playful if it had regular meter.  Well, phooey!  I now can't find the poem without losing this.  Children love this stuff because of meter and exaggeration.  I do too!  I like how Todd played with the first couplet or two.

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