Dewell, you are a master at the vernacular in many of your poems. I'd stay with it all the way through. I like the couplets. EASY to read. I tried to see if it had meter or not. That would make it more playful if it had regular meter. Well, phooey! I now can't find the poem without losing this. Children love this stuff because of meter and exaggeration. I do too! I like how Todd played with the first couplet or two.