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    tsukany

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    Post  tsukany on Fri May 29, 2015 4:25 pm

    Out on a Late-Morning Run

    These Florida trees and plants
    look plastic and out of place;  
    even the softshell turtle
    is heading toward safety.

    --Todd Sukany 20 May 2015

    Pat

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    Oh dear, no replies, what does this mean?

    Post  Pat on Sat May 30, 2015 1:14 pm

    Laughing.  Okay, the title says what you are doing.   In MO, I suppose.  And you are seeing palm trees?  (Property owner loves FLorida? and does not go with what grows easily in MO.)   I can see what you see.  It looks all wrong and weird.  I suppose the turtle does not like it either. . . heading another direction?   I noted your syllable count on title and lines - 7, except last line.   Your thought comes through with an image.  Nice.
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    Karen

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    Age : 64
    Location : North Little Rock

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    Post  Karen on Sat May 30, 2015 4:09 pm

    Todd!  I fear my comment will be longer than the poem.  I am with Pat ... I can see what you see, and that is always a consummation devoutly to be wished in my book.

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