QUEEN KONG TOMATO

Sad for the departure of home-grown tomatoes ...

Karen

What about moving stanza one to the end of the poem?  Start with stanza two.

Todd

I like it!  I still have all the parts I want, but the ending isn't as pat.  It keeps the reader guessing in a different way.

Love the form you are using with this fruiting vine.  To suddenly personify the plant as late as Stanza three left me guessing during first read.  Should Jack-In-The-Beanstalk have some connectors in there?  I get your message in last two lines but it seems powerless... lost in preceding descriptors...  can you break these lines off someway to give them back the punch, surprise they deserve?  Good poem...  I can smell the vine, taste the tartness... Dewell

I like the format:   like a growing tomato.   I like the last line:  it has punch enough for me.  I like knowing it's a huge tomato.  First stanza.  I read and read the poem:   you really don't require first stanza unless you are giving the poem as a gift to Caroline.  It may have helped you get into the mood for the poem?

Karen,  You drew the picture so beautifully.  I could never have said burnished black but that is so accurate on those little doogies.  Bet you can't pronounce that word. (could be dugies since it rhymes with rouge)  I liked that you centered it on the page. It is the little things that sometimes helps to form a poem and we don't even notice.  You wanted the vine-plant to be tall and straight but it wasn't and often they aren't.  You make it so believeable as if you really knew how to grow a vine. And then finished it off to give the title credence with the out-of-place grapefruit.  Good!