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My goal here is to communicate that I find nurturing in these books. Help!

Post  Pat on Fri Jan 27, 2012 6:57 am

When the Sun Goes Down



It may just be the way

I run from the bothersome,

the petty, the mundane:

my eyes peruse the pine shelves

of my living room.



This afternoon, the weak

winter sun comes through

a west window and slides down

the bound books

that have long surrounded me

with their magic.



Here, I am walled in

by many spines of hardbacks.

Titles draw me, the paper

within comforts my fingers,

the words speak to my heart.

Here, I reunion with a family

of authors and poets (some dead,

some alive.) These folks

never tire of blessing me

with their wisdom, their stories,

their lives.



Like a child to grandparents,

it feels right having them near

when the sun goes down.

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Love It

Post  tsukany on Fri Jan 27, 2012 7:47 am

Pat...really like this offering. I would like to mess with line breaks and post those musings later. Really nice! I think this is a contest winner.

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OOPS I went Crazy

Post  tsukany on Fri Jan 27, 2012 8:35 am

Forgive me in advance and please ignore all that follows, but I had great fun.

When the Sun Goes Down

My eyes read the pine shelves of my den
as a weak winter sun comes through a west window
and slides down the bound books that have long surrounded me (I love your vowel sounds in this line)
with their magic. Titles draw me, the paper within comforts my fingers,
the words speak, reuniting our family, folks who never tire
of blessing with their wisdom, their stories, their lives.
Like a child to grandparents, it feels right having them
near.
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Re: My goal here is to communicate that I find nurturing in these books. Help!

Post  dennis20 on Mon Feb 06, 2012 3:31 pm

 

 

I like the picture. The second paragraph is magic. The setting ( winter ) is a time for being cosy by the fire snuggled in a book.  I always think you are too wordy in your poems so I would have omitted the first line. I like that the spines have you surrounded.  Like soldiers or something.  The last para shows the comfort zone that books bring.  Changes from a picture to a portrait. I think the setting is as much the poem as the thought about books.  D

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Post  Dewell H. Byrd on Mon Feb 06, 2012 7:26 pm

Lovely... thoughtful...

rather spiritual poem. It moves me.

Pat, there is something about that last stanza that is rough for me to read.

Feels like it is upside down... please look at it again.

Thanks for sharing it.

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