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Considering Change
"What's happening here?" she ask men
conferring behind her office building.
The one in a black tie weighs a dark reply.
Her feet suddenly sense shifting ground.
Turns out the men can cut down
the bountiful shade trees.
Slowly, she walks back to the door
leading to a room where she
counsels sufferers to let go of weights,
remove veils, put out flaming pain.
There, she too sighs,
then a long breath follows
as her heart unknots while saying
goodbye to cottonwoods.
Considering Change
"What's happening here?" she ask men
conferring behind her office building.
The one in a black tie weighs a dark reply.
Her feet suddenly sense shifting ground.
Turns out the men can cut down
the bountiful shade trees.
Slowly, she walks back to the door
leading to a room where she
counsels sufferers to let go of weights,
remove veils, put out flaming pain.
There, she too sighs,
then a long breath follows
as her heart unknots while saying
goodbye to cottonwoods.