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    Testing as Dennis

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    Dennis2012

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    Testing as Dennis

    Post  Dennis2012 on Sat Sep 24, 2016 9:14 pm

    ROSES

    Roses are red
    And so are stop signs
    When Todd writes a poem
    It doesn't rhymes (heee haw)
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    renee.barger

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    Re: Testing as Dennis

    Post  renee.barger on Sun Sep 25, 2016 11:26 pm

    hehe!  Very Happy
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    tsukany

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    Line breaks

    Post  tsukany on Mon Sep 26, 2016 10:24 am

    Dennis2012/Todd

    I would cut the parenthetical.  It detracts from the splendid rhyme employed in "Roses."

    Todd

    Dewell H. Byrd

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    Location : Central Point, OR

    TESTING AS DENNIS

    Post  Dewell H. Byrd on Tue Sep 27, 2016 4:59 pm

    Dennis,
    Todd's poems would fit right in here on The Left Coast where almost nothing rhymes.  I like your jibe in this little-bit.  Do you have a limerick for him, too?  Hee HAW came out of Bakersfield, CA with Buck Owens.  They named the stockyards after him. Dewell

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