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Happy Holiday Season

Post  tsukany on Wed Nov 23, 2016 11:51 am

Thanksgiving

The proper antediluvian method for divining
mist, fog, or rain on a moonless night

remains an eastern look,
facing the horizon and the house

on the hill, the one with the sodium-
vapor lamp over the detached garage.

--Todd Sukany 22 Nov 2016
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Oh dear, where is the dictionary?

Post  Pat on Sat Nov 26, 2016 8:16 am

Okay, I had to look up a word.  Guess which one.  : )  I like that it is one sentence.  Good job on figuring out how to do that.  Whatever made you discover this about fog, mist, etc?  Oh, the things we are thankful for--  sometimes it's a sodium vapor lamp.  I like that you combined antediluvian with detached garage.  Old, old, old with contemporary. This makes me smile. I too am thankful for light.

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THANKSGIVING

Post  Dewell H. Byrd on Sat Nov 26, 2016 11:10 am

Short and powerful... I've come to expect this from Todd.  And a challenge for this reader to think instead of the usual brushing past a poem.  That anti-whatever threw me momentarily and I wondered if there might be a smaller, simpler word...  The contrast in this poem catches me up and reminds me of the lights on the barns common in our area.  Nice job, Todd.  Dewell

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Re: Happy Holiday Season

Post  Karen on Sat Nov 26, 2016 6:58 pm

Along with Dewell, the contrast in the poem catches me up.  And that's what I want to be.  Caught up.

Antediluvian makes the poem for me.  This poem has a quality I enjoy when I find it in my own work:  snapshot.

The use of antediluvian elevates this poem and spreads it out.  Makes it more than a View from Todd's House.

Todd, your brevity rocks.

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