Good Friends, I have completed my annual 3 month deer hunting and have returned none the worse for wear. (at least I think so) Below is one of my deer stand scrawls. I would like your imput on how best to arrange the lines of the best impact. Although it is a few hours early, let me wish you one and all, "Happy New Year!"
No Bungie
The moon drags darkness like a sailor drags a boat.
Stars are a filmy mist rising after a cold rain.
An ancient iron bridge lends a shoulder for sorrow.
Slow currents lace salty tears to reeds on shallows.
Your resounding “no” was the patter of feet
on indoor-outdoor carpet, soft, without echo.
A splash in darkness weaves waves for a mute heart.
No Bungie
The moon drags darkness like a sailor drags a boat.
Stars are a filmy mist rising after a cold rain.
An ancient iron bridge lends a shoulder for sorrow.
Slow currents lace salty tears to reeds on shallows.
Your resounding “no” was the patter of feet
on indoor-outdoor carpet, soft, without echo.
A splash in darkness weaves waves for a mute heart.