late to the party ... deconstructed mixed nuts

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late to the party ... deconstructed mixed nuts

Post  Karen on Sat Jul 29, 2017 5:19 pm

I'm late!

deconstructed mixed nuts

widow’s trick
store in the freezer
only thaw a cup
fresher that way

cashews for Chinese
pecans for sorbet
almonds for everything
sift the loose salt

Filberts pointless
Brazils a blessing
don’t put up with
peanuts now

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Nuts!

Post  Pat on Sun Jul 30, 2017 3:10 pm

Deconstructed.  Okay, but I totally stopped.  Maybe sorted?  Separated?

I'd drop 'now' in the last line.  It weakens what you just said.

Peanuts, no need to apply because you are not wanted.

Easy to understand, even offering helpful hints.

Might suggest:  sift salt.

Made me smile.

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A mixed bag

Post  Dennis 2012 on Sun Jul 30, 2017 7:52 pm

Karen,  I like the trivial subject.  It means with eyes and ears open we can find a poem anywhere. That said,  The line that I see that don't fit is, "don't put up with."  However, on reading it for the tenth time, ( I had to read it about three times to get it ) I believe you inserted the salt line in the wrong place.  Continue with the filberts and brazils then start the last stanza with "sift the salt" and follow it with the peanut comment.  I know that breaks up the symmetry but it keeps the nuts together.  After all, we nuts stick together.  Good poem

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