The Last Friday

The Last Friday is a poetry editing group. Once a month, we post a poem and then offer feedback to the other poems on the Forum. We're a friendly but honest group. We value each other deeply and desire for every poet to be published or become famous.

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Having fun for sure


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Having fun for sure

Post  tsukany on Tue Nov 21, 2017 10:10 am

I See the Glow

and then Wheezer drops the verbal bomb,
“We oughta build a tree house right here.”  
Looking around, I see nothing for miles,

no trees, donkey farms, bike ranks.
I turn to Spanky, who seems pleased
by the thunderation in the clouds

and rumbling of the rocks.  He says
something about stuffing the scene
inside ourselves until after the equinox.

--T.A. Sukany 21 Nov 2017

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Re: Having fun for sure

Post  Karen on Fri Nov 24, 2017 9:30 pm

I can't claim to parse this poem, but I love the feel of it.

Thank you for thunderation and stuffing the scene inside ourselves until after the equinox.

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I See the Glow

Post  Pat on Fri Nov 24, 2017 10:07 pm

Really?  Is this a satire/ take-off of what happened on Mount Transfiguration?  (Matt 17: 1 - 13)   

If not, I am lost and need lots of help....

If so, I'm smiling at what you did.  

Dewell H. Byrd

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I see the glow

Post  Dewell H. Byrd on Sun Nov 26, 2017 12:56 pm

Thunderation... rumbling rocks... stuff it down... I like to pick this poem apart and enjoy the colorful nuggets though I really don't get the total meaning.  I need some clues, please.  Maybe I'm too literal in my search for meaning.

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