The Last Friday

The Last Friday is a poetry editing group. Once a month, we post a poem and then offer feedback to the other poems on the Forum. We're a friendly but honest group. We value each other deeply and desire for every poet to be published or become famous.


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tsukany

Posts : 578
Join date : 2011-05-21

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Post  tsukany on Fri Jan 26, 2018 12:26 pm

Not Really Work

Just a day ago 
     I finished 
advanced degrees 
in political science, 
     economics, world history, 
oh, and sports management.  
Rather than keep 
all my knowledge 
    and wisdom 
focused, serving 
at my day job, I bus nuggets 
   to Facebook, Twitter, 
and other social media.  

--T.A. Sukany  23 Jan 2018

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Post  Ben Johnson on Sat Jan 27, 2018 4:07 pm

Todd,  Good poem.  I had to read it five or four times to pick up on the connection. Serving wasn't as helpful as day job, but the "hit me between the eyes nugget" was bus.  Good Feed.

Dewell H. Byrd

Posts : 348
Join date : 2012-01-05
Age : 87
Location : Central Point, OR

Not Really Work

Post  Dewell H. Byrd on Sat Jan 27, 2018 5:06 pm

Thread looks fine to me.  "I have a MA in PSYCH.  Would you like fries with that?"

Yet a different thread leads me to many young people I know who have no vision/goal of what they want to do in career.  Live with parents, have no kids, wander from job to job.

Avoid making a commitment>

Dewell

Pat

Posts : 610
Join date : 2011-09-12

Bus Boy

Post  Pat on Mon Jan 29, 2018 9:26 am

I get it.
You are a bus boy.
I like it.
Format is perfect.

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