Connected Poem

Hi, guys. Sorry I've been MIA for so long. I think the last time I posted, I was in the last trimester of pregnancy. Our son is a healthy, happy 11 month old! Also since the last time I was on, I started a new job which required me to get certified in Java programming, which took a good 6 months to prepare and take the test. My time is slowing freeing up, so I'm hoping to participate regularly again. I hope to participate in the discussions this month, although I'm pretty rusty. I gotta get the creative juices going again.  


Connected

I open
up, sharing with my friends.
Comments not behind my back but on my wall.

I go
through my feed,
seeing everything I should like.

I compose
a heartfelt reply to a friend,
but I only get a thumbs up. 

I stop.

Arrgh.  Social media.  Some days I *heart* it not.  

I like (no pun intended) the form I open ... I go ... I compose ... I stop.  I also like the brevity, but I think the poem might benefit from one more stanza, using a bit more social media terminology.  Tag or follow?  

Title to consider: Timeline

I enjoyed the poem and share the sentiment!

Renee

Great to have you back.  I always appreciate your comments (pun intended).

I offer two tidbits:  

1.  Can "comments" become "comment" and act as a verb?

2.  Remove the punctuation at the end of the poem as though you stop even the act of completing that line. 

Todd

Renee,
Yea to brevity
Boo to social meania

Good to have you back babe and all.
I admire the brevity of this offering.
If I were writing it surely it would wander
on endlessly.  

Yes, delete the period at poem's end
and leave it open... hanging, even.
Dewell

Nice to have you back.

I like the shortness too.

I hear the openness, the head, then the heart.

You don't get what you need/want and stop.  It's a good suggestion about abruptly stopping.  Like a doe does when she hears something. 

It's like she perks those ears and say, Whaaaaat?  : )  

Easy to follow.

Hi, all

Thank you so much for the ideas and suggestions. I was debating about the punctuation. I'll take out that last period. 

I also struggle with titles, so I will rethink it. I like the idea of Timeline.

I was debating if I had enough stanzas/content. I will play around with it some more.

Thank you again so much!
Renée

It's always "your" poem.  We just get to play with it and think about it.  I struggle with titles too.  You always get to have the last word.  : ) 
Have a good June.