New rough poem :)

Renee

I like the idea of the phone.  It is a new way to describe the situation.  Good fun from the days of coiled cords and party lines. 

I am not sure how to process the final stanza.  Can you add another clue to the importance of turning the phone off? (I'd rather figure the poem out than to have you tell me what is happening)

Todd

Renee, I think the trouble is in the last stanza.

Oh and 2nd line of 2nd stanza:  for those who don't know the persona is a writer, you might say:
I return to a blank page of writing  (Just thinking someone might try to connect page to phone) I know, longshot.

S 3:  
I knew I should've turned off my phone,
but I couldn’t resist the temptation
a better call could along.

You tell the negative.  This is human stuff.  What if you don't should on yourself and tell us what you hope for?  Example:

I let the phone call spill from the speaker.
Surely the thought of you calling
put my heart in charge.

And is the poem about waiting or calling?  Just a thought.

Renee

Is there a word missing in the last line?  a better call could COME along?

Todd

but that's how I read it anyway.  Interesting what the mind does.

I knew this poem needed work, but now I see how much work it needs.  I'm glad you didn't see the original. Haha!

Yes, I did miss the word "come." That's what happens when I write at night. lol.

Thanks for the great feedback! I'll work on it.

Write on!