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Post  kilee1231 on Thu Jun 02, 2011 6:19 am

i really liked torched marshmallow in description
Could you nmae the hotel?
get sloshed ... rubber boots - very vivid imagery

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Re: small ntown rag

Post  Cindy on Sat Jun 04, 2011 11:51 pm

Nancy, I hadn't thought about giving the hotel a name. It might require adding another stanza. My only reservation is that once I add something to a poem (or take something away), it can have a domino effect in that I might have to change everything after the point of the initial change.

Did you see the similar topics? At first, I thought those were title suggestions. I just found out that the "similar topics" section only appears if you are not signed in.

I never did find the 2nd version I had of this poem. I'm going to put it away for now and work on it some more after a month or two. I do think the second stanza could be improved somehow but I'm not sure which way to go with it.

I appreciate your suggestion!

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