Where I am now with the musician poem. . . . Enough rest! The Sabbath is over. . . back to work!

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Where I am now with the musician poem. . . . Enough rest! The Sabbath is over. . . back to work!

Post  Pat on Mon Dec 31, 2012 8:28 am

Where Musicians Lead



One Sunday morning

three men pick and strum

curved guitars under glowing lights.

Another draws a bow

over submissive strings.

A fifth holds his harmonica to lips,

closes eyes and blows angelic sounds.

The woman at the piano reads no music,

but her fingers skip and play

grace notes.



Musicians, like shepherds, lead;

worshippers follow,

inhaling and bursting forth

in a song of praise,

lifting words of old

to the newborn king.



After the service,

the unhurried musicians

let the music run,

urging echoes to linger

around a babe in a manger

whose song is never done.



Pat Durmon, 2012

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Post  dennis20 on Mon Dec 31, 2012 9:02 am

Pat,  Looks good.  I would suggest this for a little ear candy. "A fifth holds harmonica to lips, his eyes close, he blows angelic sounds"  However, that may add more than you want.

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Thanks, Dennis. . . .

Post  Pat on Mon Dec 31, 2012 2:20 pm

noted and changed. . . I'm always trying to see the HIS and HER thing. . . .and sometimes I must use them, but I missed this one completely. Thank you. . . . good help. And I changed babe in a manger to manger-babe. Forest/trees. : )

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