Tis the season for short offerings. :)

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Tis the season for short offerings. :)

Post  tsukany on Tue Mar 26, 2013 10:35 pm

This is just an image poem that I hope presses a bit outside of the frame.





SOLITARY BIRD


sits on the fence post
barely visible to me
‘cuz of the snow storm.

She must wonder if
it’s worth the flight
after the lie of instinct.

---Sukany 21 March 2013
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Post  Pat on Wed Mar 27, 2013 7:32 am

I like it. I hear your voice so clearly. I can see the snow-covered bird. 2nd stanza: Oh, to question the instinct. . . . hmmm. To go with the gut instinct and then get caught in the snow storm. Sad. Nature. Reality. Yep, it moves outside the frame.

I like the all-caps in the title for the small poem. And the "must wonder". . . . Good way to say it. Pat

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Post  Dewell H. Byrd on Thu Mar 28, 2013 3:56 pm

I like BIRD/BYRD poems. And I agree with Pat on all of her comments. Todd, I enjoy your economy of words here and in PROMISE (Spare-Mule). This poem is complete, yet I wanted a third stanza marrying solitary and instinct... is that worth pursueing? Would this poem be more "solitary" if not personafied? ... it instead of she? Short poems often speak volumes, don't they. Dewell

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