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I pray for the soul of a snake
because he was sleek
because he was beautiful
because my attention
brought the shovel to his head
because he was sleek
because he was beautiful
because my attention
brought the shovel to his head
4 posters
very short
Karen- Posts : 320
Join date : 2014-10-25
Age : 70
Location : North Little Rock
tsukany- Posts : 927
Join date : 2011-05-21
Karen
I love that you made me question past tense until the last line. Wonderful.
I saw a large, but skinny, black snake while running Monday. I still think the best snakes are like yours: twice the fun.
Todd
I love that you made me question past tense until the last line. Wonderful.
I saw a large, but skinny, black snake while running Monday. I still think the best snakes are like yours: twice the fun.
Todd
Pat- Posts : 1167
Join date : 2011-09-12
Second time around. My computer is struggling. Trying again.
Help me by naming it: black snake? rattlesnake? copperhead? Black snakes do no harm.
Attention? That stopped me, though I know you are intently watching it. But was it might or fear that brought it down. Did you slam it on its head? I chop heads off with a hoe. Jimmy shoots copperheads. We breathe with relief. He got mad at me for killing a black snake once upon a time.
Great image. I can definitely relate.
Calliope might publish it. : )
Help me by naming it: black snake? rattlesnake? copperhead? Black snakes do no harm.
Attention? That stopped me, though I know you are intently watching it. But was it might or fear that brought it down. Did you slam it on its head? I chop heads off with a hoe. Jimmy shoots copperheads. We breathe with relief. He got mad at me for killing a black snake once upon a time.
Great image. I can definitely relate.
Calliope might publish it. : )
Dewell H. Byrd- Posts : 385
Join date : 2012-01-05
Age : 93
Location : Central Point, OR
Karen,
Very, very short indeed.
And clever, too.
I like short words in any short poem... so, beautiful and attention
detract a little from the poem for me...
I have no alternate words to offer, sorry.
Have you considered publishing a short chapbook of brief poems?
Dewell
Very, very short indeed.
And clever, too.
I like short words in any short poem... so, beautiful and attention
detract a little from the poem for me...
I have no alternate words to offer, sorry.
Have you considered publishing a short chapbook of brief poems?
Dewell
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