SET-UP AT 7-11

I'll gladly take anything you offer on this piece.
My recent visit to a 7-11 that had been robbed
left me suspicious of everyone.  Dewell

SET-UP AT 7-11

Skinny dude slouched on a stool
hand on the .357 Colt under the cash register,
other hand on his gun.

Compressor coughed, sputtered, died.
Flies buzzed the green OPEN
and the blue BUD.

Long-hauler slathered mustard on a poorboy
with his keen-bladed knife,
popped a beer from his six-pack.

Two-Time Harry sat in a booth by the door.
Gutter hair draped his crooked nose
as he thumbed a "Girlie" and patted his 9mm.

Two HOODIES left motor growling, cased the joint
with eyes blank as flooded fields. They hitched
their pants and leaned on the belled door.

   Dewell H. Byrd

Dewell

I note a couple things:

The first stanza the "dude" (which I lobby becomes "one") has two hands and two guns.

Stanza two has no people.  What if you ready the reader for the "field" simile at the end of the poem?

Can stanza four become one sentence?

The last stanza needs a weapon in it.  All others (with people) have weapons.  Why is hoodies in all caps?

Todd

Dewell, I like the action verbs:  sounds and gestures.
I agree with Todd on HOODIEs.  I didn't understand the caps.  I wouldn't make them more important than the other people.
Gutter hair. I do not know what that means. Can you be more descriptive. Greasy.
I like the suggestion skinny one....
Don't lose "blank as flooded fields..." That's a good line.
I don't know guns, but weapons in every stanza sounds lethal! 
Interesting.
I was in a Dollar Store a week after murder there. It was eerie!
I think I was wide-eyed too.
Lots of goodness in this poem.

I don't have anything to add. I agree with the others. Lots of goodness in the poem. (I'll admit at first I thought I read 9-11 and was confused for a good minute or two! )