New poem here... be tough...

Pat

The stanzas seem to backtrack.  What happens if you change nothing but the order of stanzas?

I have an arrangement in mind but I'd love to see another.

Todd

Jimmy's nap is over!  The yard is calling.  
More later.

Would you start S 2?  

Todd, my brain is going round and round.   Whatever you see/think, I want to hear it.

Have pity....

Thanks, Pat

Sweet Luck

Fresh from hearing talk
about river property for sale,
I mention it to my husband.

I hear a crow caw overhead

Flowing stone-cold waters,
tranquility.

Wonder if the music of a river
lessens menopausal headaches.

Just how luck works.
A little word overheard,
a dream,
the way the moon arcs over a house,
timing of a phone call.

Whom you marry & where you live
may rest on the seemingly little things.

I think I like the rearrangement. When that first stanza was at the beginning, I felt like I was told too much. I liked it as a strong closing. 

I like the images a lot. I can see why a river property would be so desirable, as I sit here in a little apartment in Kansas City.  

I don't have any dislikes or criticism. The poem works for me.