ENDANGERED

A bit late.  Just got home.  With severe colds.  LOVE PAT'S NEW BOOK.
Help me find the rough spots.

ENDANGERED

The way was clear
Except for deer
Crossing

He could have swerved
Could have slowed
Could have stopped

He leaned forward
Jammed the gas
Chose the spotted one

Tiny hoofs danced
Slipped, slid on blacktop
Spots flew

Headlights shattered
He stopped at the Local
For a six-pack

Popped a Bud
Blew gravel
Hurried home

To his nest.

   -Dewell H. Byrd

Dewell

I like the poem.  I wonder if it is stronger without the first stanza.  The last line seems to tell what we already know as readers from previous intentions.  (nest didn't have a context for me)

Thanks again

Todd

It is great! 
Love the images of swerving and skidding.
I see it! 
Spots flew:  well said!
Shattered, popped, blew : strong verbs.
Get rid of last line. Redundant.
Skinny poem says a lot!