This is very raw

Papers on the Floor
“And they are dry and eternal.”  -- Robert Bly

I
I love to know paper shredded on the floor in late December;
The floor beneath their colors is secrets, and silence--
Clearly littered with plastic straps--
And they held it all together.

II
This is the covering children know in the dreams from sugar-plum pillows,
Covering that wraps our best intentions,
With the joy of something promised long ago
Like a wise man’s star.

III
This covering is like a rainbow which has a single, simple message,
Unifying unlimited colors and secrets from the dreams of our deepest love.
Rainbows invite an upward gaze refreshed in noble deeds
As December’s star holds it all together.

--T.A. Sukany 26 Dec 2018

Yay, a twofer!  I got to know Robert Bly's poem as I studied yours.  This is the kind of response poem that makes me wonder why I don't use the poems I love as launching pads instead of fretting that I didn't write something as wonderful.

Lines 3 and 4 of the first stanza mystified me.  I loved your repetition of the structure of the original poem.  The theme worked well for me.  I want something other than Like a wise man's star at the end of the second stanza, so I can be wowed by December's star at the very end.

I am humbled that this is today's draft.

I like the I, II, III
I see how you paralleled.  Nice job.
Stanza 1 - is secret or is secrets?
What are the plastic straps?
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I like Stanza two as it stands, but I think you need two different nouns in the last lines of S 2 & S 3.   I'd use star once, like Bly used horse's tail and rooster.  
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Stanza three: 
What about December's rains?   Trying to connect with rainbow.

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Fine poem.  Fine model.
Well done.  
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WAY over my head, Todd.
When it comes to the craft of poetry I get lost quickly.
So I can't help much in that regard.
However, I love that III part with the rainbow images.
In that part I would opt for inclusion of,
Gentle as a rainbow    and let it be light, water, promises.

But then I am a romantic.

Dewell

Papers on the Floor
“And they are dry and eternal.”  -- Robert Bly

I
I love to know paper shredded on the floor in late December;
The floor beneath their colors is secrets, and silence--
Clearly littered with plastic strapping--
And they held it all together.

II
This is the covering children know in the dreams from sugar-plum pillows,
Covering that wraps our best intentions,
With the joy of something promised long ago
Like a wise man’s escort.

III
This covering is like a rainbow which has a single, simple message,
Unifying unlimited colors and secrets from the dreams of our deepest love.
Rainbows invite an upward gaze refreshed in noble deeds
As December’s Star holds it all together.

--T.A. Sukany 26 Dec 2018

and helpful.  : )  I totally missed:  late December.  That is the biggest clue.  duh.  I like what you did with December's Star.  Yes, of course.

Glad you stayed with it.

Todd,  I liked the way you "bundled" so much together with the Christmas, er, December scene.  I do prefer star at the end since that was the escort and seems to me carries more weight in this setting.

Far reaching poem here.  Very good.

Dennis