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The Last Friday

The Last Friday is a poetry editing group. Once a month, we post a poem and then offer feedback to the other poems on the Forum. We're a friendly but honest group. We value each other deeply and desire for every poet to be published or become famous.


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Holiday Poem with serious holes

tsukany
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Post  tsukany Fri Nov 27, 2020 11:11 am

White House

My sister was the favored one.  
A pony, a poodle, a poodle skirt--
for Independence Day.  

She painted her doll house
in rainbow 
for Christmas, or was it 
President's Day?  

No matter.  I am older now 
and over it.  
I just fixed the cabinet
and cleaned my paintbrush.

--T.A. Sukany 26 Nov 2020
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Holiday Poem with serious holes Empty Good one.

Post  Pat Sun Nov 29, 2020 3:39 pm

I like it.  Everything is presidential.  Title, Independence Day, President's Day, paintbrush.  
Love the thought of being over it Smile and white paint.  Rainbow. Poodle skirt tells me the decade. 
You got all of it in 3 short verses.  How do you do that? 
Good one.
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