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The Last Friday is a poetry editing group. Once a month, we post a poem and then offer feedback to the other poems on the Forum. We're a friendly but honest group. We value each other deeply and desire for every poet to be published or become famous.


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tsukany
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Post  tsukany Thu Jun 24, 2021 12:57 pm

Another Introduction to Poetry
“. . . take a poem and hold it up to the light . . .” Billy Collins

I open the book and read until I find a poem
staring at me . . . all short lines 
and lacking punctuation.  

Oh, there is a capital letter
(in the middle of a word).  
A quick look to the bold font 

of the title offers little sustenance, 
even though it’s followed by a quote 
from someone I’ve never worked with.  

I scan the surface of the poem, 
eating itself out from the middle 
of the page, to inquire, 

“Why do you look so?”  
I must have made a wrong turn 
a page or so back or missed 

the sentence of warning:  
Lace up your shoes. 
Poetry is a virtue for the long run.

--Todd Sukany 24 June 2021
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Post  Pat Fri Jun 25, 2021 3:32 pm

Billy Collins.  He has left his mark on many of us. 
Interesting work. I follow easily. I like the poem, but ....
Line 2: staring or staring back at me?
Stanza 2: nice, as a discovery
Stanza 3:  though or even though?
I would like to look at the poem you are looking at. The poem does not share the name of the poem.

Last stanza: I like the middle line.  Especially from a runner. Smile  


the sentence of warning:  
Lace up your shoes. 
Poetry is a virtue for the long run.


I understand that poetry helps for the long run of life.  I think most of it is goodness.  That last line seems a telling line, as I read it. The warning:  you could trip? This is long run-thinking. Details are important, and you are pointing them out? You can see how my mind is running.
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Post  tsukany Fri Jun 25, 2021 4:15 pm

Pat

This is a response to a Preface for an Intro to Poetry book.  The author suggests understanding poetry is something for everyone, but it takes great effort and experience.

There is no poem on a page in reality; I am simply painting a picture of a reader approaching a book and finding a poem on the page (the poem itself scares the reader . . . in my imagination).

Thanks for the feedback.

The last two lines of the poem are now joined by a semicolon (I know that is still cheating since it is technically two independent clauses).  I have them indented on my computer but LastFriday steals those details when I hit SEND.

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Post  Pat Fri Jun 25, 2021 5:39 pm

Okay.  I sort of see.  I remember meeting e.e.cummings on a book page. Luckily, I had a teacher who let the poem be fun and did not explain every nook and cranny.
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Post  renee.barger Tue Jun 29, 2021 6:48 am

Have you shared this poem before? It felt familiar to me somehow.

I really liked the poem. I get scared of poetry and know a lot of people who do too. I felt as if I was the speaker, approaching a new poem and confused at why unconventional things were done. I have no criticism. It worked for me.

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