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The Last Friday

The Last Friday is a poetry editing group. Once a month, we post a poem and then offer feedback to the other poems on the Forum. We're a friendly but honest group. We value each other deeply and desire for every poet to be published or become famous.


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Feels incomplete but I kinda like it. Idk

renee.barger
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Feels incomplete but I kinda like it. Idk Empty Feels incomplete but I kinda like it. Idk

Post  renee.barger Wed Jun 01, 2022 11:08 pm

I started two new poems in April, but one is a bit more presentable than the other. I'm sorry I'm consistently late. It's so short that I keep moving the line breaks or changing phrases. I just can't get it quite right.


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I'm happy for you, honestly.
It’s just that your happy news 
reminds me 
I'm still praying and waiting.
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Post  tsukany Thu Jun 02, 2022 8:20 am

Renee

I like this poem.  I am going to mess with the line breaks (so I can say I offered a "critique.")

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I'm happy for you, 
honestly.
It’s just that your happy news 
reminds me 
I'm still praying and 
waiting.

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Feels incomplete but I kinda like it. Idk Empty I like the line breaks

Post  renee.barger Mon Jun 06, 2022 7:59 am

I like the line breaks you added. Anything else? I can't tell if I like the poem or not. Smile
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Post  tsukany Mon Jun 06, 2022 8:05 am

Renee

I find the poem conversational.  I find it packs a punch.  I find those two highly prized characteristics.

Todd

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Post  renee.barger Mon Jun 06, 2022 8:15 am

That is good to keep in mind -- conversational and a point/punch. I oftentimes can't tell if my poems are worth anything or if they're just short prose or a note to myself and not really poetry.
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Post  tsukany Mon Jun 06, 2022 9:44 am

Renee

I remember the first time I read the following poem.  It was found in the Dover "100 Best Poems."  This Is Just To Say by William Carlos Williams | Poetry Foundation  (poetry foundation is a well-honored publication)

Todd
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