I really need help on this potentially excellent poem. Should S. one be S. three? Is the pond a loose end? Better if couple are Jess and Becky? See what I mean?
Square Nails And Old Roses
An autumn breeze quilts the farm pond.
Vanilla light leans into the hour
As the chimney's shadow creeps long.
A young couple filled with hope built
A log cabin with square nails and
Planted rosebushes in the door yard.
Now the pecan tree shelters them
Beneath marble markers that sum their lives.
Two more headstones simply say "baby."
Seasons turn by faith alone and
Children scatter leaving time at rest
Like an hourglass reclining on its side.
An old man, exiled by winter, leans
On his cane, picks the last rose
From the bush that entwines yesterday.
-Dewell H. Byrd
Square Nails And Old Roses
An autumn breeze quilts the farm pond.
Vanilla light leans into the hour
As the chimney's shadow creeps long.
A young couple filled with hope built
A log cabin with square nails and
Planted rosebushes in the door yard.
Now the pecan tree shelters them
Beneath marble markers that sum their lives.
Two more headstones simply say "baby."
Seasons turn by faith alone and
Children scatter leaving time at rest
Like an hourglass reclining on its side.
An old man, exiled by winter, leans
On his cane, picks the last rose
From the bush that entwines yesterday.
-Dewell H. Byrd