(Hope to get your poems critiqued tomorrow. )
I struggled with pronouns!!
He Tells the Story While It Is Raw
Holding the receiver to his ear,
he tells a son two states away
about what happened to the dog
and how no one is to blame.
I watch him close his eyes,
listening hard for the response.
He grows silent, drops his head,
then coughs a little.
After goodbyes are said, he clings
like a bat to every word he heard
while I keep circling, sighing,
staring-off into the dark.
I struggled with pronouns!!
He Tells the Story While It Is Raw
Holding the receiver to his ear,
he tells a son two states away
about what happened to the dog
and how no one is to blame.
I watch him close his eyes,
listening hard for the response.
He grows silent, drops his head,
then coughs a little.
After goodbyes are said, he clings
like a bat to every word he heard
while I keep circling, sighing,
staring-off into the dark.