Home for the Holidays (I hope to setup warm feelings of holiday memories, of which I will ironically dispose. I will setup the long "o" sound and the "s" in this title.)
The internet shows a map of your state, (I want to play with dual meaning of "state." I introduce another person who is not in the same location as the persona. I attempt a Billy Collins technique of stating the entire poem in the title and first sentence. I am pressing the "s" sound into the ears of the listener.)
streaked with four colors, noted in the key, (These are the actual details of the map. State maps have "keys" to indicate the level of "travel safety" for major highways. I chose "streaked" because it is an unsettling word. I am continuing the "s" and repeating of the Home/shows your/four sounds.)
its legend. A winter stream bears my weight (I wanted to press the poem outside a bit to refer to an entire life in the word "legend." Again, "legend" is an attempt to grab more than one meaning from a word. A "stream" is a blockage or a pretty scene, the reader gets to chose (I press the irony button again). Since it is a "winter stream," I hope the reader will attempt to cross that stream on "thin icy," which I represent in the words "bears my weight." I want "weight" to have more than one meaning as well. "Weight" could sound like "wait" to one listening and not seeing the poem itself on the page. More "s" sound and returning to the vowel sound of "state" with the word "weight.")
in bending glass, stretching toward the icy (I state the comparison outright here in "bending glass." "Stretching" is seldom a good thing and I wanted to add to the overarching tone of melancholy. I chose enjambment here to force the CHUNK of "bottom." I continue the "s" and add "stream/icy.")
bottom where nothing moves, no leaves of Spring. (I attempt to return to the "traffic map" "where nothing moves" and hint at a cause for the poem's tone. "Spring" is a symbol for new beginnings (I hint at color here without adding more words). However, this poem is Winter so I should not expect any life-giving change as a reader. This is to revisit irony. I add the "b" to the sounds of "streams/icy/leaves" and the continued "s.")
Seems more than colors separate us. (Though not stated directly, the persona admits that the relationship is strained and the other party may have to stay "Home for the Holidays," completing the ironic trip of the poem. It is possible that the persona cannot travel to the other person and, thus, the persona will be the one "Home for the Holidays." I break the ten syllable count with this line since it should feel incomplete...as does the persona. Sounds repeated are the "s" and long "e.")
--Sukany 27 Dec 2012