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Post  tsukany Mon Feb 21, 2022 8:43 am

Symmetry or Not
“But the fruit of the Spirit . . .” –Gal 5:22

The nineteenth letter in the English alphabet
is biblically troubling.  Clearly, Isaiah 45:2 
prepares us for an unbending.  Turn that “S”
into an undotted “I” . . . please.  

While there are multiple examples 
of this irksome curved letter, two jump out.  
John the Baptist did not mispeak himself
when he pointed to Jesus.  He had no lisp 

or locust wing in his front teeth.  He shouted
that Jesus takes away the singular offense 
of the world.  But that is the New Testament.  
Perhaps balance is in order.  

King David dropped a club in arguably
his most famous song about his shepherd.  
He calmly sings about the way of righteousness 
in the plural.  It is this instance that allows 

The Great Shepherd to lead you 
away from me to follow Him.

–Todd Sukany 30 Jan 2022
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Post  Pat Sun Feb 27, 2022 2:18 pm

I question my interpretation.  I'm thinking the S is for Shepherd or Spirit.  I'm guessing you are talking about the Lord is my Shepherd (David's Psalm 23).  Is that right?  
Fruits of the Spirit:  9 of them, so I guess that lacks symmetry?  off balance. God, Jesus, Holy Spirit is 3, odd number too.
It's all about the Shepherd we are to follow.  Not about the "I".  I hear a plea to make it about the "I"...
that's man, all right.  We want it to be about ourselves.  God told Cyrus he would level the path for him, but it was about God, not Cyrus. Right? So Cyrus would know it's about God being the one and only God. (Isaiah quote)
John the Baptist recognizes Jesus as the Savior/Shepherd of the world, another S.  Baptism... to fulfill Old Testament scripture and righteousness. Balance... back to O. Testament:  David who is a king. Ps 51:  He wants forgiveness for his sins.  He will sing of God's righteousness. It shows he has a broken spirit.... is that how you came up with the fruits of the Spirit?  
I wondered about the use of club instead of sword. Something with a blade.
I paused at arguably.
I'm wondering if the last two lines mean:  leading away from King David (man) to follow the Great Shepherd. 
I think I got super fuzzy when the poem talked about plural-- are you trying to say God, Jesus, Holy Spirit?  That is plural and all are involved in the scriptures mentioned. 
Whew! 

I esp. like:  He had no lisp/ or locust wing in his front teeth. I also like "unbending". 

I always go for the meaning first.
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Post  Pat Wed Mar 02, 2022 7:47 am

there's always fruit-- right?  Actually, that's a good point that many do not know and bears repeating.
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Post  tsukany Thu Mar 03, 2022 6:51 am

Pat

This poem may be too compressed.  That is why I posted it.  It needs attention.

I am poking at the power of "s."  These are examples of how we read into texts what we want to see rather than what is there:  "Fruits" "Sins" "Path"

My intention is probably STILL not clear.

Thank you for your faithfulness to the struggle.

Todd
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Post  Pat Thu Mar 03, 2022 7:59 am

We struggle together.

I think I'd stay with the poking, and you need club and locusts in teeth! And even more.  So someone like me sees the wildness, the sarcasm.  I'd focus on more poking.  Not sure that I'd add the fruits.  It's enough with John the Baptist! You may have three poems here. 

Most of us struggle with just one of the pictures presented.

You know how cowboys poke a campfire.  I'd poke and poke.  

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Post  renee.barger Thu Mar 03, 2022 1:50 pm

I love where you're going with this. The first sentence got my attention. Is the Isaiah reference accurate? I had no idea what I was looking at.

The part about a locust wing in John's mouth made me laugh. Very good.

I got a little lost again about David. I couldn't put enough together to know what you're referencing, but it could also be my tired brain at the moment.

Are all of these examples pointing back to the fruit of the spirit?



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