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The Last Friday

The Last Friday is a poetry editing group. Once a month, we post a poem and then offer feedback to the other poems on the Forum. We're a friendly but honest group. We value each other deeply and desire for every poet to be published or become famous.


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One more if you have time

tsukany
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Join date : 2011-05-21
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One more if you have time Empty One more if you have time

Post  tsukany Sat Jul 16, 2022 11:44 am

From Here
(Romania Poppy Field and Hillside –oil on canvas)

Sinking into a bed of green and sunshine 
I feel I can touch the hem of red poppies.
Three buildings grow before my eyes–
city hall, the mercantile, a community
center.  Soon we will rise, push
our way over the hill to the field 
of promise, pregnant with peace.

–Todd Sukany 13 Jul 2022
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One more if you have time Empty An ekphrastic poem inspired by a painting, but

Post  Pat Sat Jul 16, 2022 5:13 pm

I don't know which one.  
Can you name it, so we can maybe find it? Even if it's by a new artist, I'd honor him/her by listing the name of the painting. Happily, there are many such paintings, so I enjoyed a couple. Monte's was one, of course.
Other than that, I don't see much to check out.
I esp. like "hem of red poppies". 
Good job of making me think about the promise land. 
Last lines, esp good.
Also like the two fields...

We've been watching WWII movies.  A friend's gson just returned to the states from Romania.  So my mind went to a war scene in the midst of this poem-- poppies, then concrete city, then promise land.  Like the narrator figured he'd die there. "We" will rise...  Soldiers; "push" sounds military to me; field of promise...heaven; pregnant with peace... yet to come. Peace is the opposite of war.  Has to be heavenly...
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