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The Last Friday is a poetry editing group. Once a month, we post a poem and then offer feedback to the other poems on the Forum. We're a friendly but honest group. We value each other deeply and desire for every poet to be published or become famous.


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Gathering Clouds

tsukany
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Post  tsukany Mon Aug 28, 2023 12:22 pm

Gathering Clouds

Amid the variety in a one-room flea, 
saints share a meal. Words join 
heaven and earth in recitation 

and song. Pursuit. Blood. Body. 
Communion. All dismissed 
through the same door. 

--Todd Sukany 27 Aug 2023
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Pat


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Post  Pat Mon Aug 28, 2023 3:48 pm

I read it 4 or 5 times. My brain ran along these lines: 
Title made me think of clouds assembling together like a mass.... as in nature.
Clouds gathering...

As I read the poem, I began to think of "cloud of witnesses". Words (worship) unite heaven and earth.
Together in a room, there is the sharing of a meal like the Lord's Supper, communion.
I like the one word-period combinations: Blood. etc. All saints leave the same way....leaving flesh and this world behind (death): that is how I took it. It infers to me that we saints will leave the same way.
Hope this helps.
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Post  tsukany Mon Aug 28, 2023 6:12 pm

Pat,

That is perfect.  Were you able to identify "flea market" as a store-front church?

I am so happy!!

Thank you

Todd
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Post  Pat Mon Aug 28, 2023 7:46 pm

To answer your question, I did not go to marketplace. I've been to such a place, too...in L. R. and I've been to Salvation Army Church.
In my mind, I went to a small room that was full of people, and everything was plain and spare.  
You might say:  store-front flea? 

"one-room" was good.  It took care of me. 
Good one.  
Pat

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