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Post  tsukany on Sat Dec 20, 2014 7:58 am

Surreal Decor


Siberian tiger skin, docile on oak flooring,
once used stealth and powerful forearms
to hold victims steady
until seized by the throat
and strangled.  This orange-banded
predator head stares, wall-mounted,
his teeth and eyes
polished by maintenance
at minimum wage.  


Another dressed-in-stripes
holds his head high
knowing DA offices
are decorated
by plaques and praise
for releasing and relocating
their victims.

--  Todd Sukany 14 Dec 2014
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Trophy?

Post  dennis20 on Sat Dec 20, 2014 9:55 am

Todd,  Nice pictures.  I'm not sure if you are drawing the type or antitype, but that is the way with poems. Leave it up to the reader.  I guess, in line with the title, it could be about the decor, but it is very human and emotional which touches on the spiritual and leave one with hope.  I like that aspect better.  I really don't like the "polished by maintance/at mimimum wage."  In this pithy picture, I don't see the connection. Ok, I reread it and it makes sense. The cleaning crew in an elite office...  I like the choice of orange for the connection.  Very thoughtful.

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Post  Karen on Sat Dec 20, 2014 2:32 pm

Well, here I am less than a week from Christmas, ripping the gift wrap off one poem after another.  It's just plain greed.  I am struggling to write (poetry, non-fiction, fiction) from places other than my tiny world, and I enjoyed this comparison.  I liked thinking about an atypical subject.  It made me want to look wider than the topics that occur to me easily, find out what I know and think about something different for a change.  Thank you for that.

One thing did bother me.  Is the tiger on the oak floor or the wall?  I'm a little worried he's a trophy head made to look down on his own skin as a rug.  Say it ain't so.

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Brom Bones

Post  tsukany on Sat Dec 20, 2014 2:52 pm

Karen,

I am glad you noticed the separation of body and head; no additional discomfort was intended.

p.s.  No actual animals were used in the creation of this fiction.

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Post  Karen on Sat Dec 20, 2014 3:03 pm

Poetry requiring a wrangler!

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SO FRESH THE ELECTRONS...

Post  Dewell H. Byrd on Mon Dec 22, 2014 11:54 am

I'm having trouble connecting the title to this poem.  Just can't get it to fit.  I see stark truth and irony here... makes me think... wonder if office and home could be occupied by the same person???  I like the minimum wage bit because it is so real... and the cheap labor of the rifle bearer, the cleaning person of the DA's office (my addition).
And I keep thinking about the messages in this poem.  Thanks, Todd.  Dewell

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The title

Post  tsukany on Mon Dec 22, 2014 12:22 pm

Dewell,

I am checking the new format color of text first.  The title of the poem is "Surreal Decor."

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Surreal Decor

Post  Pat on Mon Dec 22, 2014 3:19 pm

Crazy at my house.  Hope I can make sense. 
Irony and fun.   Surreal:   dreamy, weird, fantastic.   Not real.
Okay.   Tiger on wall of the rich office.  Strong enough to make victims dead.  But they are killed and displayed on wall.  Owner of office is so proud of it.  Displays it. Poor workers clean the wall mounting.?????   Then the D.A's office:  they walk around in pinstriped suits.   they catch and release?   or Witness Protection.   And they have pride about releasing.  Just like the killers of the tiger:  pride filled, both of them, about what they did with/to the subject.  Aren't we a strange and savage lot????  Don't know if my interpretation is right, but I enjoyed the comparison/contrast.

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