MID-SUMMER

Does the last stanza fit in this poem?  Perhaps a bridge is needed between stanzas three and four.
However, a mystery is created reading it as is.  Is it unusual for a tangential thought to impose itself upon a simple scene of nature?  What do you suggest?  Dewell

MID-Summer

Fireflies trace tight zigzags
stirred by a snail breeze
along the shoreline.

A skein of Canada geese
briefly shadows stars
with Doppler honks

rising, falling, fading.
Bullfrogs drum wet thunder
Over the shallow water.

I smile, remembering something
you said about the smell of fireflies
on your fingertips.

   -Dewell H. Byrd

Dewell

Nice offering, again!

I wonder if you can play with "skein" in each stanza by creating a "tapestry" of images.  

I wasn't bothered by any jumps in logic.  The title seems to be an area you could strengthen though.

Todd

Dewell, I especially like the last stanza.  If you change skein, you might think about its shape, like the shape of Kentucky or the shape of an arrow.  Are you asking if you need transitional bridges?  If so, I think what you have works.  I don't much like the title.  How about, "Standing Under a Mid-Summer Sky" or "Aware Under a Mid-Summer Sky"  You could throw in 2 more images and not bore me.  I like these. Stanza 3, line 3:  I'd drop the.  Overall, I like it.

The title must go.  It's not fair of me to jump on the bandwagon without suggesting an alternate, but here I am, empty-handed.  The title seems to need a specific image, or a comment.

I like the little jump at the last stanza.  I love the reference to the smell of fireflies.  Anyone who has collected them in a jar knows that smell vividly.

I agree with Pat on cutting "the" in stanza 3, line 3.  Other than that, and a worthy title, I think it's just right as it is.

Dewell,  I think it blends together nicely.  It is what I expect from the title.  Years ago I would not have expected geese in mid-summer, but now they stay here year round.  The last lines nail the first lines beautifully. I could live without shoreline since it wasn't something in my summer, but all the rest resonance for summer. Good picture here.