The Last Friday

The Last Friday is a poetry editing group. Once a month, we post a poem and then offer feedback to the other poems on the Forum. We're a friendly but honest group. We value each other deeply and desire for every poet to be published or become famous.


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Karen

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eek, she's back!

Post  Karen on Fri Oct 27, 2017 7:22 pm

Welcome, Heidi!  

I got to see Pat and Dennis in Little Rock last weekend, yay!  Todd and Dewell remain just short of fiction in my world. 

I do believe in poets; I do believe in poets.

My poem this month is brief.

today the blackbirds

walked the length
and breadth of me.

when certainty rushed
calling, clapping,
flapping
through their
pecking mob,

they silenced,
flew a little way,

then lit again.
then lit again.
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tsukany

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Welcome Back

Post  tsukany on Sat Oct 28, 2017 9:48 am

Karen

I took "certainty" as an uncapitalized pet name.  Perhaps the pet was attempting to clear the bird off the owner who was prone on the ground, pecked by the mob.

How'd I do?

Todd

Pat

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Blackbirds

Post  Pat on Sat Oct 28, 2017 1:27 pm

I don't know who certainty is, but it seems significant and wants to help you.
I love the poet's images, sounds, actions.

Can you clarify certainty?  Seems like a personification.

Enjoyed it, but a little puzzled.
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Karen

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Re: eek, she's back!

Post  Karen on Sun Oct 29, 2017 10:05 am

Clarification:

Blackbirds = doubt.

Certainty =belief.

Pat

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I see.

Post  Pat on Sun Oct 29, 2017 3:00 pm

Thanks for clarification.  

I don't want to mess up your image, but I think the poem is strong enough to say:  Belief instead of certainty.  I think the opposite of belief would be doubt, so we can probably guess the blackbirds to be doubt.   I think.

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