Is the Title Effective (Dennis/Ben)

The light of you is missing
 
There is a special room
with an easy chair. A
padded lace pillow with
the imprint of a cat leans
against one arm. A table
with a granite top covered
by embroidered doily sits near.
On the shelf beneath its curled feet
an overstuffed magazine rack
gathers dust. No words are read. 
No voice is heard. The cat
only pauses at the doorway.

Oh, I would change very little.

I would add an before embroidered doily.

The title doesn't entirely satisfy me.

What about Missing light as a title?

Dennis/Ben

I think you can clean up the first line by cutting "There is"  An easy chair (verb that carries weight) in a special room.

This line is a double of the description "On the shelf beneath its curled feet" thus "its" becomes confusing.

The title leads me to a spouse missing the mate.  The poem doesn't echo that promise.

I like how cat appears as a connector.  I would like one with "light" from the title.

Thanks for sharing

Todd

Try "Cluttered Memories" as a title.
The word "only" down with the cat has to go.
The cat seems to connect once prized items with memories... good stuff.
Some very nice images, Benden.

Dewell

Missing You?
I think they've said it all.
Easy to follow.
I like it.
The room is full of this and that, but it's missing you. 
The cat, the dear cat.

TS
This is a good genre for you.  Sort of imagistic and sort of Li Po-ian.  The result of a different mindset about poetry, isn't it?  No longer a puzzle to decipher, but an experience/a moment offered--one very much directed by the title.

Markus

Markus

Sometimes Dennis has trouble logging in.  He joins us as Ben Johnson for those times.  Additionally, Ben/Dennis has trouble posting in the folder of the month.  Thus, I post his work for him.

All that to say, this fine craft is not Todd but Dennis/Ben.  I am still stuck in the cluttered, compressed world of my mind.

TS