If you remember, my last poem was about my friend's wedding registry. This is about her wedding. I expanded it quite a bit from the first draft (after I had read some Robert Frost.) Does the story make sense and the message/emotion I'm trying to convey?
Also unsure about my grammar and punctuation.
Honor and Cherish
Our gaggle of gals grabbed a back pew seat
on the side of the bride, our bosom friend.
We chatted and giggled like school girls
as family filed past to the front.
The music played.
The mothers escorted.
The maids promenaded.
The multitude stood.
The bride with her father entered.
Her eyes already brimming with tears
spotted her expectant groom.
Everyone beaming back at her,
Everyone pausing with her
to recognize, perhaps for the first time,
a person in the worst seat in the house.
With no designated wheelchair section in that old church,
her brother with CP sat with his attendant
behind even us in the very back pew.
She kissed her brother,
whispered something only for him,
and took again her father’s arm.
We ended up having the best seat in the house.
______
Renee V. Barger
Also unsure about my grammar and punctuation.
Honor and Cherish
Our gaggle of gals grabbed a back pew seat
on the side of the bride, our bosom friend.
We chatted and giggled like school girls
as family filed past to the front.
The music played.
The mothers escorted.
The maids promenaded.
The multitude stood.
The bride with her father entered.
Her eyes already brimming with tears
spotted her expectant groom.
Everyone beaming back at her,
Everyone pausing with her
to recognize, perhaps for the first time,
a person in the worst seat in the house.
With no designated wheelchair section in that old church,
her brother with CP sat with his attendant
behind even us in the very back pew.
She kissed her brother,
whispered something only for him,
and took again her father’s arm.
We ended up having the best seat in the house.
______
Renee V. Barger