I need feedback on this, esp. the last stanza. Thanks.
Graduation Night
First,
caps and gowns sit together
as two big blocks,
almost straight lines.
Rewards announced for hard work.
Exciting.
Second,
individuals stand with good friends,
bonded by sports, plays, proms,
sitting side by side in history.
Golden.
Third,
it’s an hour to grope but not yet grasp
the future.
Probably a big stretch to imagine
the odds of seeing one another again.
Confounding.
Graduation Night
First,
caps and gowns sit together
as two big blocks,
almost straight lines.
Rewards announced for hard work.
Exciting.
Second,
individuals stand with good friends,
bonded by sports, plays, proms,
sitting side by side in history.
Golden.
Third,
it’s an hour to grope but not yet grasp
the future.
Probably a big stretch to imagine
the odds of seeing one another again.
Confounding.