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tsukany
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Post  tsukany Sat Apr 17, 2021 10:07 am

Accept a Corn of Wheat Fall

I can’t remember if I started out in a package 
or a bag.  Illegal as can be, I'll be sown
into the privacy of the owner's yard.  In late fall,
before the dark winter, I will once again 

be surrounded by three inches of black.  
Inside my safety bran of night, I sense 
radicle movement in two directions.  
Within weeks, half of me will burst the surface, 

accosted by light.  The pain.  The pain.
The exposure.  Soon enough,
I will harden my external security 
and press toward full maturity.  

I expect to find 
the same end 
as my hero, 
the Baptist.

--T.A. Sukany 17 April 2021
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Post  Pat Tue Apr 27, 2021 11:37 am

I'm thinking you are marijuana.  Seeds to be sown. Illegal to grow.  Then sown and raised in the night?  Radical movement in 2 directions:  is this legal (medical) and illegal use. (Med. MJ movement?) Seed multiplies. Part of the crop could go one way, part the other? Half of me because the other half is roots. Darkness vs Light? Painful to come into the light. Exposure. The Dark does not want to be exposed.  Maturity, then beheaded like John the Baptist. Death, then it can be used one way or the other. Seed always has to die first to grow, like Jesus had to die, the Baptist had to die, to spread the Word.  ???

The title: Not Except/ Instead, Accept, so it's saying to accept the fate, the process?  the seed, at death, multiplies and potentially affects a multitude.  

Two levels.  Nice.  If I'm anywhere close to what you are saying. Smile  

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tsukany
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Post  tsukany Tue Apr 27, 2021 12:19 pm

Pat

You tracked perfectly . . . other than I am thinking wheat rather than Mary Jane.  Others have commented on the latter interpretation, too.

"Radicle" is the technical term within the seed.

Others requested "seed" rather than "corn" in the title.  I am such a KJV guy.  Sad

Thanks for the critique.  Anything else you can suggest I change?

TS
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Post  Pat Tue Apr 27, 2021 1:50 pm

radicle and didn't.  Smile

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